Essay1 rewrite

I will tell you Toy Story. It is the American animation movie which was released on
November 22th 1995 in United States of America. Four months later it was also
released in Japan. Toy Story was produced by Pixar Animation Studios, and The Walt
Disney Studios distributed this movie Toy Story. Tom Hanks (the real name: Thomas
Jeffrey Hanks) who is famous for the actor of “Saving Private Ryan” played the leading
part. The total proceeds of Toy Story in the whole world were 361958736 dollars, and
the proceeds of it in USA were 191796233 dollars. The director John Alan Lasseter got
Academy Special Achievement Award which is one of Academy Awards. In addition,
scenario award (Andrew Christopher Stanton Jr.), original main theme song award
("You've Got a Friend in Me"), and musical composition award of comedy (Randall
Stuart Newman) were nominated although none of them was awards.

No toy speaks languages and is lifeless although some toys can move with human
strength. However, this movie makes me feel sympathy for the toys. I learned to think
that I should make it a rule to handle everything more preciously. When I become a
father, I will tell my children not to handle their toys roughly. Or, they will become
accursed. If I were a living toy, I could not endure my toy’s life because I would be
broken or injured by bad kids. Then, I would continue to curse them until they are
scared, so you had better handle not only toys but also foods, drink, and many other
tools. Or, you may be punished by heaven. I will remember it, and you must also!! Toys
are same as friends and partners for me and for a child playing alone. Especially, I like
Hot Wheels, TOMICA, and Radio Control Cars. All of them are my precious.

Essay2 rewrite

I will tell you School of Rock. It is the comedy movie which was
released on October 3rd 2003. The director was Richard Linklater.
The scenario writer was Mike White who is famous for the
producer of Freaks and Geeks. The producer was Scott Rudin who
got 80th Academy Award for Best Motion Picture of the Year,
Academy Award for Best Picture.

The main actors are Jack Black and Joan Cusack (real name:
Joan Mary Cusack). Jack played as Dewey Finn. Joan played as
Rosalie "Roz" Mullins. In addition, Mike also played as Ned
Schneebly. Other actors are Sarah Kate Silverman, Rebecca
Brown, and Miranda Taylor Cosgrove.

Dewey loves rock music fanatically. However, he was fired the
band club because he performed too fanatically and selfishly. If I
were Dewey, I would behave not so fanatically, but calmly,
logically, and like an adult member of society. It is true that I also
have something to be fanatical. For example, I like sports cars, so
I tell some car enthusiasts many Japanese sports cars’ details
fanatically sometimes. I also drive a car fanatically on some
expressways. As a result, I have been charged with speeding.
However, I could know how important behaving as an adult
member of society is after I saw this School of Rock.

If you do not want to be fired the club or the corporation, you had
better make it a rule to behave calmly, logically, and like an adult
member of society, and you had better do it a rule to consider
logically and to straighten your clothes. In addition, you had
better be careful for your health. You had better make it a rule
not to drink any liquor and not to smoke. Or, you will be shamed.
I want you to remember all of them.

24 Rewrite Essay Final

I will tell you about the first episode of 24-TWENTY FOUR-. The following thing caused between AM 0:00 to 1:00 on March 2002. The stage is a day (24 hours) of United States presidential primary in California, United States of America. Jack Bauer gets information that David Palmer who is the first black runner of the president will be assassinated in 24 hours. In addition, it is suggested that there is the traitor in CTU.

On the other hand, Kim who is the daughter of Jack Bauer and a senior high school student is kidnapped by the group who is planning to assassinate Palmer. After that, Teri Bauer who is his wife is also kidnapped by the group.

What is worse, the political scandal crystallizes because the son of David Palmer seems to have killed someone. Jack planned to protect the Congressman. However, he is regarded as a criminal who did assassination of a Congressman because the terrorists threatened him “Become the criminal who did assassination of a Congressman, or we will kill your daughter and wife”.

Kiefer William Frederick Dempsey George Rufus Sutherland played Jack Bauer who is the main character of the drama. The drama was broadcast by The Fox Broadcasting Company. The company produced Prison Break and X File which are the same category as the former.
Which do you like the best 24-TWENTY FOUR-, Prison Break, or X File? If I have a chance to watch all of them, I will try doing once. Although it is my opinion, no other foreign drama is as interesting as the one. If there is more interesting foreign drama, it is ER (Emergency Room) which used to be broadcast on National Broadcasting Company in America. Still, I love 24- TWENTY FOUR- better than ER because the drama made me amazed.

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BR2-15 Titanic

Cameron’s film, Titanic, was very expensive – it cost $200 million. Every minute of the film cost $1 million. (page 8)

I will tell you Titanic. Titanic was the biggest ship in the world- 24,900 tons. The length was 265 meters long and 28 meters across. The biggest ship amazed many people. Of course, I was also marveled at the super great hugeness of the ship. However, the ship crashed into the iceberg. As a result, about 1500 people died. The next day evening news which was the most famous newspaper said “Titanic disaster great loss of life.” I recognized that controlling the ship is pretty dangerous work for me. If I make a little mistake, many people will be killed by me.

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 Vicary, Tim. (1999). Titanic. Oxford: Oxford University Press. 

BR2-14 Traveling Around

Cars are good for travelling long distances. They are comfortable and get people to where they are going very quickly. Buses are good for carrying a lot of people at one time. It costs less money to travel on a bus than it costs to run a car. (page4~6)

I will tell you how to drive well. When you ride on a bus, you had better sit on the front seat. Then, you watch the bus driver, and you learn how to control the bus. And you may be much better than now. Before you drive a car, you had better get sleep as much as possible. I make it a rule to get sleep at least 8 hours before I drive a car. In addition, you ought to be calm at all times. Or, you will be injured in the accident.

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 Brasch, Nicolas. (2007). Traveling Around. South Melbourne: Thomson Learning Australia.   

BR2-13 Powering Cars

Gas is an alternative to petrol. One type of gas that is used to power cars is called Liquid Petroleum Gas or LPG. LPG is a good alternative to petrol because it does not need lead to improve its performance. It also gives off less carbon dioxide when it is burnt. However, LPG does contain some other gases. These gases also harm the environment when LPG is burnt. (Page16~17)   

I will tell you Powering Cars. It is true that petrol gives many people bad influence. However, the fuel is necessary for Motor Sports. Especially, it is for World Rally Championship, SUPER GT, Indy, F1, etc...

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Brasch, Nicolas. (2007). Powering Cars. South Melbourne: Thomson Learning Australia.

BR2-12 HOT and COLD

Temperature is measured on a scale. There are two scales: Celsius and Fahrenheit. The Celsius scale is named after a man called Celsius. He lived from 1701~1744. The Fahrenheit scale is named after a man called Fahrenheit. He lived from 1686~1736. Some countries use the Celsius scale to measure temperature. Some countries use the Fahrenheit scale to measure temperature. (Page6~7)

I will tell you HOT and COLD. On the Celsius scale, water freezes at 0 degree. On the Fahrenheit scale, water freezes at 32 degree. On the former, it boils at 100 degree. On the latter, it boils at 212 degree. I think that it is important for me to remember Fahrenheit scale because it is shown as Fahrenheit in United States of America and United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland although it tends to being disposed.

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Brasch, Nicolas. (2007). HOT and COLD. South Melbourne: Cengage Learning Australia

BR2-11 Ice on Earth

SEA ICE. “Sea ice is ice that forms on sea water. Sea ice does not form on land like an ice sheet, an ice cap or an ice shelf. It does not fall into the sea like an iceberg. Sea ice forms on water and floats with the sea.” (Page 14, Chapter 6)

I will tell you SEA ICE (Chapter 6) of Ice on Earth. Although it is my opinion, Sea ice comes from global warming. Today, global warming is one of the international problems, so I make it a rule not to use any heaters, or any heating although it is pretty hard for eastern and northern Japan.

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Brasch, Nicolas. (2007). Ice on Earth. South Melbourne: Thomson Learning Australia.

BR2-10 Walking on the Moon

Neil Armstrong and Buzz Aldrin walked on the moon for more than two hours. They collected lots of rocks for scientists back on Earth to study. They also left behind a plaque that read: HERE MEN FROM PLANET EARTH FIRST SET FOOT UPON THE MOON JULY 1969 A.D. WE CAME IN PEACE FOR ALL MANKIND, The astronauts returned to Earth on 24th July 1969. (Page22~23)

  I will tell you Walking on the Moon. When you go to the Moon, do you understand what you have a duty to do? You must study science, space engineering, earth science, physics, and others. In addition, you must exercise too, or you will be injured. If worst comes to worst, you will die.

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 Brasch, Nicolas. (2007). Walking on the Moon. South Melbourne: Thomson Learning Australia.

BR2-09 Celebrating New Year

“New Year is the time to say goodbye to the old year. New Year is the time to celebrate the coming of the New Year. New Year is celebrated by people all over the world. A lot of people have come here to celebrate the coming of New Year.” (Page5~6)

I will tell you Celebrating New Year. January 1^st the next year 2012 will come. However, I am not happy so much even if the next year (2012) comes because I have to take examinations of autumn term (the latter half), so I make it a rule to celebrate the New Year on April 1^st at 12:00 AM. Especially, Kumamoto City has already decided to become an ordinance-designated city when the day become 2012 April 1^st. Therefore, I will do champagne fight alone.

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Reilly, Carmel. (2007). Celebrating New Year. South Melbourne : Thomson Learning Australia. 

BR2-08 Water World

“Different industries use water in different ways. Most industries need water for heating, cooling and washing. Some industries use water to make food and drink. Almost all industries need more water than we need in home. Heavy industries, like power stations or chemical plants, use a lot of water.” (Chapter 4, Page 14~17)

I will tell you how important water is (Water World). I could know that water is the most important thing for us to stay alive. If you have little water or no one, you cannot drink anything, work in heavy industries, wash your body, and use any restrooms, so I would you like to make it a rule not to waste our precious water.

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 Trussell-Cullen, Alan. (2007). Water World. South Melbourne: Thomson Learning Australia

BR2-07 Cars

Bad Things about Cars “More than anything, millions of people around the world have been hurt or killed in car accidents over years.” (Page.13)

I will tell you “Cars” (Bad Things about Cars). I think that cars become running deadly weapons although they are pretty convenient. I have seen many great accidents which shocked me greatly since my childhood, so I make it a rule to study the knowledge of cars, to sleep at least 8 hours, to fix my mentality, to control a car surely, to obey the traffic regulations, and not to speed. Although it is too hard, I must be able to do such things. Or, I will be underrated.

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Reilly, Carmel. (2007).  Cars. South Melbourne: Thomson Learning Australia. 

Mystery in London BR2-06

You knock on the red door. There is no-one at home. (No.26 Page. 20)

I will tell you Mystery in London. It is like Sherlock Holmes who is the fictional detective in United Kingdom of Great Britain and Northern Ireland. The Mystery makes me interested because whole story is the questions. It is a novel book.

Six women are dead because of the Whitechapel Killer. Now another woman lies in a London street and there is blood everywhere. She is very ill. You are the famous detective Mycroft Pound; can you catch the killer before he escapes? Can you solve the secret? If you want to read the book, why don’t you borrow it?

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Brooke, Helen. (2000). Mystery in London. Oxford: Oxford University Press    

A new school BR2-05

The other children drifted away and Sunita was left on her own. She did not know what to do. She was scared. (page6)

I will tell you A new school. When you are supposed to go to other school, what are you confused about? I will be confused about the friendship, how to study, etc… When I was 11th grade, I hurt my two classmates. If I had quitted the senior high school, I would have raged a professional racing driver. When you are confused, you may confer with anyone. Or, you will be alone. ‘All for one, one for all’ please remember the word.

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Strong, Jeremy. (2001). A new school . Harlow: Pearson Education           

New York BR2-04

New Yorkers often eat at the ‘deli’ or the delicatessen. These sell wonderful sandwiches. There are lots of ‘fast food’ shops to buy something to eat quickly. There are food stands on many street corners. These sell hamburgers, hot dogs, pretzels, and drinks like Coca-Cola. Go to Chinatown for the best Chinese food, and Little Italy for the best Italian food. You can eat twenty-four hours a day in New York! (page4)

I will tell you New York. If I have a chance to visit the city, I will do so. Especially, I like a hamburger and American Sandwiches because both of them have super deliciousness.

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Escott, John (1995). New York. Oxford: Oxford University Press      

Amazon Rally BR2-03

In the morning, Chief Maoni and his people are very happy. A lot of Indians are dancing. Chief Maoni has two beautiful necklaces in his hands. He smiles and gives a red necklace to David. (page 5)

I will tell you Amazon Rally. It is like Saving Private Ryan or Die Hard although it is my opinion. The book gave me the courage to survive in hard condition. Before I read the book, I had thought that it is the book like the fight of World Rally Championship. However, it is absolutely different. You had better not go to Amazon, or you probably die.

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Amos, Eduardo. Prescher, Elisabeth. (2000). Amazon Rally. Harlow, England: Pearson Education Limited.       

William Shakespeare's Romeo + Juliet Rewrite Essay5

I will tell you about William Shakespeare's Romeo + Juliet. The movie was released by 20th Century Fox Film on November 1st, 1996 in United States of America. 168 days later it was also released in Japan. Baz Luhrmann (real name: Mark Anthony Luhrmann) was in charge of both the director and one of the scenario writers. Craig Pearce was also in charge of the other of the latter.

It is famous for Leonardo Wilhelm DiCaprio having played Romeo Montague who is the main character of the movie. Juliet Capulet who is the heroine of it was played by Claire Catherine Danes. John Leguizamo played Tybalt. The budget was 14.5 million dollars. The box office was 46 million dollars in United States of America.

The original is Romeo and Juliet (William Shakespeare), and the lines are not changed at all. However, the stage is changed to Verona Beach which is one of the fictional names in the movie.

After watching this movie, I thought the destinies of both Romeo and Juliet were lost ironically because the family of the former was quarreling against one of the latter. If I had been Romeo, I would have killed myself, or run away from home. In my house, there has been a quarrel between my mom and my grandmother since 2000. If you confront this situation, what would you do? I dislike the situation. I wish the quarrel stopped forever.

If it continues, I feel like living in my childhood girlfriend’s house forever. However, I don’t want to make up to her and her mother. It is hard destiny for me although I would not like to assume great responsibility if I could escape. I will ask every woman. If you were Juliet, what would you do? If I had been Juliet, I would have killed Romeo and myself. Therefore, you may ask whoever if you have something wrong with yourself.